Help with my story writing please

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Help with my story writing please

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Whats some examples of the noises you make in you sleep? E.g. 'he heard her _____ as she rolled over in her sleep'
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Moan, sigh, groan, mumble?
It's kinda difficult to come up with suitable verbs if we don't know anything about the character, setting, situation, or emotional environment. It all depends on the "vibe" you're going for.
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Whell she's gone asleep calmy and pleasintly but in her sleep she starts to move and said movement brings all manner of chaos to the guy.

She's suppose to be a kind, loving, gentle, mature, yet with a big bit of domination(kinda shooting myself in the foot with trying to display such charateristics in one person((But I think I've got it)))
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If she's having a bad dream, you can't go wrong with a good old-fashioned moan. Things can get more intense from there (i.e. screams, gasps, etc.).
But in the end, it's up to you and you alone to decide how your characters express themselves.
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I'll go for a mumble and a moan. Thanks for the help.

Though I might ask another question at a later time
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